[עזרה] אנגלית בדיקת קטע.. טעויות וכאלה..

[roiking]

In the story – "The Birds" the main character - Alex , made a crucial decision , that in the beginning it's seems that he did good decision. But this turned out as a big mistake.
Alex was 67 years old 'and live in small town in London . he don't like the people that live near him .Becouse the trouble and the noise that they did every day .
Therefore Alex decided to leave the small town and live near the abandoned (from people) lake .
This decision change his life ,he satart to adapt to the new quiet life and he begin to love and to take care of the birds that live in the lake . Because he in quiet place and not alone (hr have the birds ).
But after 3 month the birds migrate to other place, and Alex become sad and alone .After he feel how much it's difficult to be alone he wants to come back to small town in London.

I think that alex decided good decision that leaved the small town in London. But He had to think on the influencein live near abandoned place . so I think that if Alex was decided differently and move to other counter or city he will slove all his problems and his life will be better than life in small town in London .

היי
תראו אני צריך עזרה אם מישהו עם אנגלית טובה .. שיכול לעבור לי על הקטע הזה..
ולהגיד לי איפה יש לי טעיות .. כתיב/זמנים/ אנגלית לא נכונה וכ"ו..
אשמח אפילו אם אפשר להחליף במילים לרמה גבוהה יותר ..
תודה רבה

[Asaf]

תיקנתי חלקים ראשון נשבר לי הזין אחרי זה.
שמישהו ימשיך.

The Bird's main character, Alex, made a crucial decision which in first place looked good, but turned out to be a big mistake.
Alex is 67 years old. He lives in a small town located near London. He doesn't like people that live near him because of the trouble and the noise that they do every day.
Therefore Alex decided to leave the small town and live near the abandoned lake.
That decision changed his life ,he satart to adapt to the new quiet life and he begin to love and to take care of the birds that live in the lake . Because he in quiet place and not alone (hr have the birds ).
But after 3 month the birds migrate to other place, and Alex become sad and alone .After he feel how much it's difficult to be alone he wants to come back to small town in London.
I think that alex decided good decision that leaved the small town in London. But He had to think on the influencein live near abandoned place . so I think that if Alex was decided differently and move to other counter or city he will slove all his problems and his life will be better than life in small town in London .

[Daniel]

The Bird's main character, Alex, made a crucial decision which in first place looked good, but turned out to be a big mistake.
Alex is 67 years old. He lives in a small town located near London. He doesn't like people that live near him because of the trouble and the noise that they do every day.
Therefore Alex decided to leave the small town and live near the abandoned lake.
That decision changed his life ,he started to adapt to the new quiet life and he began to love and to take care of the birds that live in the lake . Because he is in quiet place and he isnt alone (he have the birds ).
But after 3 month the birds migrated to other place, and Alex became sad and lonly .After he felt how difficult is being alon he wanted to came back to small town in London.
I think that alex decided a good decision that he left the small town in London. But He had to think on the influencein live near abandoned place . so I think that if Alex was decided differently and move to other countery or city he will slove all his problems and his life will be better than life in small town in London

בסוף יש איזה קטע של פאסט פרוגרסיב.. שאני לא מי יודע מה.. אז פחשתי לתקן סתם
אבל אחי.. איזה כיתה אתה? למדת past simple? יש ללך שגיאות ברמה של כיתה ד'.. מי שוכח פועל עזר?

[Asaf]

באמת צורת כתיבה לא טובה.
אתה צריך להשתפר מהר.

[yakir132]

Asaf יש לך איזה אתר לשיפור אנגלית משהו אחי ? .. תודה .